nocturnalScribblerFeatured By OwnerDec 19, 2012Student General Artist
Welcome to the Hamsteak. It's pretty fabulous. Always make sure to check above and below the comic because sometimes there are subcomics.
I like how each kid has their god tier symbol behind them, but... > John's appears left out because Dave is over it. The shape of his works well in that it would have gone at the bottom easily. Especially if you had made Rose's sun a bit smaller. It takes up a lot of space, including some of Jade's body. I think the character spacing cold have been done a bit better, the gap with the white in between them is kind of strange and distracting.
> I really like how Dave's gear fades into the background but keeps its shape. I think maybe the other symbols should as well, so they're more symbolic and less objects chilling with the characters.
> John's pose looks pretty stiff, and he is cut off at the ankles. It just looks super uncomfortable, especially while holding the Zillyhoo. Maybe a more realistic pose?
> Rose has a cape that defies the wind working on everyone else. Their fabric all blows to the left but hers remains stagnant. More folds and dynamic clothing interacting with the characters and itself.
> The colors in the background are fabulous, they mix and balance well with each other. Carrying the red tones through was a really good idea.
> John's hips and groin area are a bit off.
> You included weapons for the boys, but not the girls. Rose has knitting needles and Jade uses a rifle. It probably isn't meant to, but it almost diminishes the skill they have at fighting. Girls holding sparkly things instead of weapons. They're good fighters too, so it would make sense to do it for all of them.
That's about all I have to say, Homestuck sucks you in, don't read it during the school year! Happy holidays.
Hello! This is =liyaperfidious, a participant in the contest. Here is my critique:
Overall Impressive portrayal of a group of characters. Their varied expressions bring out more of their personality. You know how to use your medium well. The shading is great! Especially how the background appears to image from a white nothing. Magic.
Anatomy What to improve is their faces. They appear 'lifeless'. (Yes they still do have emotions but for instance, the girl in black outfit, her smile seems a bit stiff, like she is pretending to smile.) Try looking at this: [link] The girl in that picture I linked seems to have a natural and unforced smile, even with little stokes of lines to show it. I really love the way you draw hands. I really do. The fingers are so soft. While the clothes are drawn fabulously, with the red cloak flowing swoosh and the orange cloth draping gently, they lack folds. Guy in the blue shirt (Sorry, I wish I knew their names so at least I won't have to mention them with their colour) -- his sleeve and trousers (at the knees part) could use a bit more folds.
Colours Each character is given their own colour theme, which is awesome because it helps to remember them and make their personality pop out more. The colour of the background is a bit too similar to the characters themselves. The girl in black is at the black part of the background. What would be cool is if the black colour of the background is translocated, in which the black part is behind the guy in blue.
Other things The weapons they hold have volume! Good job. It would be even more epic if it had shiny parts! Another suggestion is: adding more stars in the background to make it look even more magical. And the glows around the things the girls in black and orange are holding should be more visible. It is better to use other colours besides white for glows to make it more interesting.
Thanks for reading this! I hope I make sense and do not confuse you.